As I stand in the heat still I’m cold
I try to look for warmthnes but I can’t find
It’s a cold world
As I walk down my street I try to speed up
I see cars speeding by I see a lot of writing
On the walls fences broken
It’s a cold world
As I watch TV I see a lot of news people killing other people or another person just ended up in the hospital
It’s a cold world
As I go to school I see red blue everywhere the cops
Outside of my school maybe another fight
It’s a cold world
8 comments:
Hey Gustavo!
I liked your poem, it was really good. Its so vary true, it is a cold world. What you wrote in it, was right on the dote of what happens in life. Keep up the great work.!
i like the poen reminds me of some things
Nice job don't forget to use comas. Maybe put a little more detail on it. Yea parts of the world are cold but others are OK. Life is what you make it and we are were we want to be.
you did good you. Missed some comas, but it's still really good. Hell yea the world is cold but thats why you gotta find something or someone that makes it better for you.
gustavo a poem writer is a person with an amazing talent and i know this because i share the same talent. never be afraid to write and to put your words out there who cares about what they say. and yes it is a cold world out there but it is up to us to make the diffrence or to keep them.
Hey gustavo i really like your poem i think its true these people will NEVER understand what we haved lived and they will NEVER see things the way we do..
Great poem. I liked it a lot. Well written.
i like how you tell us about how your feeling.. its a good poem
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